Hey ! My name is Dymyn Cerise Carter ! My birthday is Dec.13 ! I am a sagittarius. I Always feel like i should have the last word. Sometimes it works out for me but sometimes it Can get me in some trouble ! But i think that its kinda good to argue because I feel like if i get my Point across ! I like this program Kinda but you know people want to Put lables on us and stuff ! But thats all ! <3
Love Dymyn
All I need you take another look at this and clean it up. You like to get the last word, if that is really true then you will focus on your writing because that is where that can happen for you.
ReplyDeleteI want you to add more, dig deeper tell your reader more about you (don't come up to me and ask me what to tell you what) be creative. I noticed that you used the zodiac as away to describe yourself, what should that tell me about you, what if i don't know what a Sagittarius, or how they act. You can share more without getting personal. you are much bigger personality than was described in that short verse.
Now don't get me wrong it was good, but remember "good is the enemy of (say it)"